it isn't done, i'm not entirely happy with it...but the skeleton is there. the moon turns away and leaves me quiet for a week or so....i only just managed to get this much out.
and if i may be so bold as to offer an unfinished thing....it's for my beloved Sarah...who made me remember that i might want to be a poet someday, too...she knows how the words taste and something of why we bury the stories.....
the lost girls
we sit in quiet corners
one hand gripping pen and paper tucked
furtively in apron pockets,
melting into the shadows at the edge of your masquerade
because, really,
melting into the shadows at the edge of your masquerade
because, really,
we don't belong here
we belong to storm-edged shores,
the water and wild;
where cloud-scudded skies rain wishes on horses
and ghost-breath silence
whisper shards of poems at the threshold of night.
we're smoke-boned and fierce
but the glare of your lights
and the sharp of your edge
sting cobwebbed eyes and mist-kissed skin.
really, we don't belong here.
so our souls drift off to elsewhere things
to daydreams of selkies and water-stained pages;
to haunted islands and wind-ravaged moors
where we sail wild seas and ride wild ponies
where we sail wild seas and ride wild ponies
lace at our throats and dogs at our heels.
we're glad that we came
and we're happy you noticed,
but forgive us, do, if we steal away.
hand in hand to the borderlands
because really,
we don't belong here.
we're glad that we came
and we're happy you noticed,
but forgive us, do, if we steal away.
hand in hand to the borderlands
because really,
we don't belong here.
also, playing along with One Shot Wednesday...
Mel i love the repitition in this....very thought provoking....i love this poem! :-)
ReplyDeleteYou know. Which is the deepest thing I can say to you. And the deepest joy you bring me. I want to grab you, and stare into you, and shake you a little, with delight, with amazement and profound relief, because you know. I've never met anyone else who does. But Mel, thank goddess for you, because the world feel so much less lonely, now that I can remember you are in it, and you know what it's like, what's true, AND you know how to say it.
ReplyDeleteThank you.
Thank you, so much.
ReplyDeleteso what will it read like when it finished??? already mighty fine by me...thanks for linking up with OSW
ReplyDeletecheers...Pete
believe me - i forgot to breathe while reading this..this is so amazingly beautiful..can't find words...the wildness, the we don't belong here...love it, love it, love it!!!!
ReplyDeleteOnly you would know this isn't finished.
ReplyDelete(I'd like to see it when it's done)
Nice One Shot, Mel!
wow! where do I even begin?
ReplyDeleteThis is so beautifully written. I loved each word, each line, each stanza... what clever language selection and vivid imagery -
I especially adore "ghost-breath silence", "Wind-ravaged moors" and "smoke-boned and fierce" - just brilliant! A real pleasure to read.
I can see where it reads rough - I read it aloud, as I do all poems - but the images, colorful and stirring as they are, will be stunning when you rein in/shorten the lines a bit.
ReplyDeleteExcellent-potential rough draft.
Have you ever thought of putting together a collection of poems? I would buy it.... More!
ReplyDeleteEnjoyed your "skeletal draft" and wanted to read more. Makings of a truly great poem. Cheers
ReplyDeletethank you, beautiful people, for your kindness and support..again.
ReplyDeleteyou'll all be the first to know when it's done...
:)
Dear Mel
ReplyDeleteIts perfect imagery.. I liked it very much..
ॐ नमः शिवाय
Om Namah Shivaya
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You, my friend, are a writer, a true writer and the world needs your words....I LOVE this with absolutely everything in my being I love it....you are beautiful
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